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The "Help Me Create My Roleplay Character" Thread

We already have a character help thread (for out-of-character purposes) in the other forums, so I thought it would be viable to have one here, for people to perhaps share areas of their characters that they want constructive criticism and feedback on. Also, any lore questions specifically to do with your character development can be asked here - saves you making a thread in the Lore Library for every query. However, this does not mean you can get others to write your backstory for you! Your character is your own, so only come here with genuine questions after you've spent some time working on something yourself. I have included some links at the bottom of this post with some lore help, which should hopefully give people an idea of where to start from.

Examples of questions:

  • Is this name suitable for this particular race/era/for ES?
  • Would it be realistic for my character to have this in their backstory? 
  • I'd like this to be a part of my character, but I'm worried that it is too unoriginal/is so original it might break lore?
  • I would just like some feedback on this part of my character before I make it canon!
  • This is my first time roleplaying and I'd just like some guidance in character development...welp
  • I've realised my backstory is pretty unrealistic when I did some lore research. Is there any way around this without having to completely re-write my character?

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  1. #1

    Gladerunner

    Contributor5080 Posts

    My character is like a sore thumb at an Unthrappa dinner. His first name is Gladius, which is more a homage to gladiators and their sword and board duelling style, and his last name is either Oakvale or Oakveil, which given how slick the second one is, I might run with. It should be noted that most Bosmer don't have last names and instead have extremely unique but characteristically similar first name.

    Even stranger is that my characters father is a Bosmer gladiator, and mother is a Bosmer smith.

    Regardless how unlikely my character seems, I would be happy helping others make politically correct but interesting characters. How I will enjoy removing the multitude of "Altmer killed my parents" from contrived motivations.

    If you want to hide something evil, hide it in something boring.

  2. #2

    Antoine.Bellamont

    Member359 Posts

    I've written a small amount of backstory about my character. It's in my profile, if anyone is interested in reading it. I do enjoy constructive criticism, so feel free to share your opinions with me. I know the story may seem trite, but I enjoy playing these types of characters. I tried to introduce the character's major flaws, though I may not have done as well as I could have. Let me know what you guys think!

    Edit: Can you learn enough about my character from that excerpt as well as my posts in this forum to decide whether you like him or not? I suppose that's a more accurate question than "did I write good?"

  3. #3

    Wynn

    Member20 Posts

    Ok so im pretty new to the whole rp scene. Also my elder scrolls knowledge isn't as amazing as it should be in seeing i probably have around 1500 hours play time across the elder scrolls titles. Just thought id get your opinions on whether this is in anyway not lore friendly.

     

    Mordastyr Copperhart. Son of a Breton and an Altmer, I grew up with a natural affinity for magic. Specializing in Daedric summoning and destruction spells, I spent my adolescent years working as a mercenary after being exiled with my Breton father from the Summerset isles by the Altmer who saw my parents union as an insult to the Aldmeri bloodline. Heading into my early twenties, I became full of rage and hatred. Working a job in Camlorn I contracted Lycanthropy. I spent the next few years wandering high rock as an outcast. Anger and rage caused me to return to Camlorn to take revenge. After attempting to assassinate the werewolf Faolchu i was defeated in combat. Faolchu saw the potential i had and chose to spare me. The werewolves of Camlorn taught me to control my emotions and my abilities. Now half living half dead, half man half beast, I have sided with the Daggerfall covenent for my own gains. None but the beasts of Camlorn know my true identity. For the time being I shall be satisfied with killing the enemies of the Daggerfall convenant. After all, I need some way of  entertaining myself until my plans come to fruition.

  4. #4

    Qoggish

    Moderator1231 Posts
    Antoine.Bellamont wrote on June 27, 2013

    Can you learn enough about my character from that excerpt as well as my posts in this forum to decide whether you like him or not?

    I enjoyed reading it, so thanks for sharing. :) There's a few grammatical errors, but nothing a once-over wouldn't fix. I don't think I can really judge where I like them or not just from that. But it's certainly a character you've put a lot of thought into, or it seems to be anyway.

    Wynn wrote on July 11, 2013

    Mordastyr Copperhart. Son of a Breton and an Altmer,

    That's unusual enough in itself, since Altmer and Breton hate each other. Breton ancestors were pretty much enslaved by the Altmer for years.

    Wynn wrote on July 11, 2013

    Heading into my early twenties, I became full of rage and hatred.

    Why?

    Wynn wrote on July 11, 2013

    Now half living half dead, half man half beast, I have sided with the Daggerfall covenent for my own gains.

    Why are you half living and half dead? I'm confused.

     

     

  5. #5

    Wynn

    Member20 Posts

    Thanks, took me about 15 minutes or so this morning. Definitely needs to be fleshed out a little bit and thought through. Yeah i know that the bretons get there mer blood from the aldmer after some sort of breeding program they had? I make it sound like a sci fi film, but you get the point :). Thought that maybe by having a second parent as an altmer it would enforce the fact that magic runs in my blood/heritage? Also the fact that the two races have such a poor relationship would explain why we were exiled as soon as the authorities found out.

    As for the rage and hatred bit, just a bit of a prelude to becoming a werewolf. Showing that my personality fits a werewolf well before i contracted lycanthropy. Anger comes from losing contact with altmer mother and being rejected and never really fitting in, always being an outcast.

    As for the half living half dead, the werewolf Faolchu is an undead werewolf, http://elderscrolls.wikia.com/wiki/Camlorn_(Online), havent really massively thought it through but i was thinking maybe when i take revenge perhaps i die and he ressurects me for his army. At a guess i think that if im part of the daggerfall covenant one of the quests will be to go to Camlorn and kill this undead werewolf? Just a guess but i was thinking that maybe after becoming undead and being taught how to control my power i begin to hate Faolchu for making me an undead abomination. At which point i leave to join the covenant and fight the altmer who seperated me from my mother.

    Just a first draft :)

  6. #6

    Nelfaeur

    Member83 Posts

    So I hope you don't mind helping me out. I'm new to the roleplaying world ,but I've tried to make this character the best I could. Okay is name is Nelfaeur Altelta. He is a 20 year old Altmer mage/priest. He comes from a noble family that is full of secrets. His mother is a highly religious elf that worships the divine and his father appears to be the same ,but secretly he is a a high cultist to a deadra lord. So far this is all I have any tips for me at this point?

  7. #7

    GaidenShinji

    Member132 Posts

    I have a pretty good idea for a character. Why don't you guys read on and tell me what you all think?

     

    My name, is Azran Sinai. A redguard once held in high respects in the Halls of Virtues of War, The Citadel of the Ebonarm, and the fighters guild alike fell from greatness. In my latter thirties I organized a guild of my own of well-trained young fighters in the dragontail mountains. Boys and girls that I taught in the ways of Sword-Singing, as I was a high level Ansei able to create and uphold a Shehai for over an hour at the time (which is a great feat in itself). My apprentices and I would often go off on jobs for the local populace, slaying creatures and fiends that even most militia could not handle alone. Those were the days...

    One day my guild was to take up a job from the northern orcs of the Wrothgarian mountains. A beast was plaguing the mountains, the likes of which no orismer warrior, no breton mage, or redguard rogue could defeat. In other words, a slay job, which we thought would be easy enough, oh what fools we were, what a fool I was. My over-confidence in myself and my students led us to take on the job. My students and I trekked to the Wrothgarian  Mountains and we were met with our most terrible foe, a giant desert cobra, the likes of which larger than any maormer sea snake or akaviri dragon.  My entire guild waged war on the beast for days. The air in the mountains was saturated with the blood of young warriors. On the fifth day the beast fell dead, claiming the lives of thirty young men and women and through means of poison, my left eye.

    I was the sole survivor of my guild and stayed in the mountains for thirty days, each day mourning the loss of one of my beloved students. Orc troubadours and story tellers say that I would mourn more, but my tears dried up on that last day, and I think that they are right. Eventually the orcs of the mountains came out and helped me to shelter and food, as I was far too wounded to move long distances myself. As I recovered, I only had one request,  for shrines to be erected for my brave students, and that the beasts hide be fashioned into a light armor. The orcs did this and gave me the armor. I left without a word as soon as this was done.

    Eventually all of tamriel came to know me, no longer as a seasoned warrior and masterful Ansei, but as the man that lead dozens of young lives to their deaths. I abandoned the foolish idea of having a guild and became a wanderer, a sell sword, and a vagrant. Known by my many scars from the epic battle, my blind left eye, and snake-leather armor, I now wander tamriel, trying to make a living and finding some form of redemption.

  8. #8

    Qoggish

    Moderator1231 Posts
    Nelfaeur wrote on July 23, 2013

    Okay is name is Nelfaeur Altelta. He is a 20 year old Altmer mage/priest. He comes from a noble family that is full of secrets. His mother is a highly religious elf that worships the divine and his father appears to be the same ,but secretly he is a a high cultist to a deadra lord. So far this is all I have any tips for me at this point?

    I'm not really sure what you want tips on. :) Perhaps flesh out his current self a little bit. Ask yourself simple questions like who he keeps as friends, what are his goals in life, what are his pet hates? Is he a vegetarian or does he like a big helping of steak alongside fresh vegetables? When you've laid down the base for a character, it's time to take the next step and make them into as realistic a person as you can - this includes their strengths, their flaws...basically what makes them tick!

    GaidenShinji wrote on July 25, 2013

    I have a pretty good idea for a character. Why don’t you guys read on and tell me what you all think?

    I think it's very promising, thanks for sharing! The only advice I would give is to try and stay away from the tired tropes of being the last survivor, unless that's absolutely necessary. Also, I find it a little unbelievable that a giant cobra which took the lives of thirty trained warriors only managed to damage your left eye, but perhaps you skipped over other details or wounds you sustained. You did mention other scars later, so I'm going to guess that you have thought of this yourself. :) Another nitpick would be that I find it a little strange that he managed to survive thirty days on his lonesome, surrounded by rotting corpses (which would have surely lured other beasts), without food or water (I am guessing, anyway) and yet still be too weak to move long distances without aid. Perhaps you just need to think about that part more and make his sole survival during that time a little more realistic.

    That's all I can pick at though! I like the idea and the fact you have created a strong warrior, but with acknowledged flaws. I hope you find him a purpose once more when you roleplay him in ESO.

    Wynn wrote on July 11, 2013

    Thought that maybe by having a second parent as an altmer it would enforce the fact that magic runs in my blood/heritage? Also the fact that the two races have such a poor relationship would explain why we were exiled as soon as the authorities found out.

    I still think that given their lore, it would be very unlikely that a Breton and an Altmer would be in a relationship. But stranger things have happened and if it's a vital aspect of your story, you should keep it. But as a note, the Altmer would rather kill mixed blood offspring than merely outcast them, and would have probably tried to kill your father too - perhaps the mother, but I'm not sure how much freedom they give their own as to what partners they choose. As for the other parts - about the anger, etc - it just seems a very one-dimensional character of pain and angst. Has he never found happiness? Does he have no more to his personality? Werewolves can be balanced characters too! :) Although I understand the reasoning behind making him so hateful, try and not make him lean so much into the sociopath spectrum. It can be challenging to keep up such a single-minded character without becoming bored with the lack of depth long-term. You have plenty of time to expand more on him though, if that's what you want.

     

  9. #9

    GaidenShinji

    Member132 Posts

    @Tonsha

    Thanks for the tips, and I forgot to mention, yes the other scars of battle I mentioned was inherited from the beast as well. I should say that he only had the strength to drive the weaker beasts away from the corpses, but not enough to travel the long distance to the Orcish village. I appreciate the critiquing.

    Usually the characters I RP with are filled with joy 24/7, sorrow 24/7, or sadistic and evil. This was my attempt at making a character that's more human. Has his ups, his downs, his good times, his bad times, strengths, weaknesses, and faults. A vagabond who was once living high amongst his peers, now struggling to make a living wandering from city to city, and province to province.

  10. #10

    Qoggish

    Moderator1231 Posts
    GaidenShinji wrote on July 28, 2013

    Usually the characters I RP with are filled with joy 24/7, sorrow 24/7, or sadistic and evil. This was my attempt at making a character that’s more human.

    I always support the goal of making realistic characters! I think you've done well at balancing the highs and lows of his life and creating a story that fits into the tumultuous land of Tamriel. If you need any more advice feel free to ask. Otherwise, I wish you luck with the continuation of character development and I'll hopefully be able to meet Azran myself in-game. :)

     

  11. #11

    Henson

    Member163 Posts

    Hey fellow RPers!

    I have been lurking here for a bit and would like to flesh out a character I have played (and will replay in Skyrim) in hopes to "recreate" him in ESO. I decided to go with my Old Orc, Urzog the Bloodied, who is seeking a good death and an honorable battle of violence to finally end his life. Here is a bit I wrote for him:

    "Body is weary. The road has been long. But there is life in these old hands yet...

    Hammer is heavier than it used to be, not like the early years. Hammer remembers many faces, the bones broken, the skulls crushed, the blood sprayed. Pain radiates through my fingers, arms sore from battle, scars too many to count. But there is life in these old hands yet...

    Tribes will not accept me. Cities cast me out. No one wants an old, beat-down Orc. Wandering the lands to come closer to the Good Death, I seek a champion to release me of my sorrow and shame...

    But I cannot go quietly. My Violence and Rage still burn. Warriors, Wizards, Trolls, Abominations, Dragons: let them come! If I shall die, let it be for Honor. Let it be for Prince Malacath. I welcome death if it knocks at my door, but I will meet it with Violence and Rage, for there is life in these old hands yet..."

    Taking a look at some of the RP questions from the helpful threads, I want to adapt this character into a sort of unconventional Orc. Being he is an outcast due to his age and inability to have taken on his tribe's chieftain, he has gained wisdom from his travels and is exploring magics to keep him going. No longer can he carry his warhammer, he is taking up a mace and shield to pummel his foes to continually gain the violent respect he owes to Malacath.

    I am having some trouble in terms of timeline here being that ESO will be taking place 1000 years-ish before Skyrim. Trying to figure out from what Orsinium location he is being ousted from and where to start his pilgrimage. If anyone has any tips that would be great! I will be hopefully contributing into the RP group here a ton in the future!

  12. #12

    Qoggish

    Moderator1231 Posts
    Henson wrote on July 28, 2013

    I am having some trouble in terms of timeline here being that ESO will be taking place 1000 years-ish before Skyrim. Trying to figure out from what Orsinium location he is being ousted from and where to start his pilgrimage. If anyone has any tips that would be great! I will be hopefully contributing into the RP group here a ton in the future!

    Hello Henson! It's lovely to see another Orsimer roleplayer posting. As for your above questions, I'll try and help with what I know - but it seems Orsinium and the lore around it is quite murky at this time. I'm sure someone will correct me if I am wrong, but at this point in the timeline, Orsinium is not supposed to exist after numerous attacks by the Redguard and Breton. It seems ZOS has changed this lore for ESO to give every race their own capital city, but there's a discussion somewhere on Tamriel Foundry which compares the opposing quotes from both ZOS and other parts of the lore we have. (EDIT: Found the discussion: link)

    In any case, it seems Orsinium in ESO does exist at this point in the timeline according to the most recent developer answers about this subject. How else I can help you, I do not know. Your reaching out for help is very vague to the point of asking people to decide for you. If you're wondering what areas to have him travelling in, perhaps look at a map of Tamriel and plot out some areas to add to his history.

    I recommend reading the following threads for some good ol' Orsimer lore, which might help inspire you more as you develop your character. :)

    Feel free to ask for more advice and I'm sure people will be happy to help if they can.

     

  13. #13

    MrProwley

    Member60 Posts

    I like to rp my character as a descendent of my Eljin In Skyrim who is the descendent of my Eljin  obvilion.  All have the classic ranger persona to them and only  joined the Aldermia for game purposes in truth he doesn't care for politics but does care that if an idiot gets put on the throne ready to fire an arrow at who he fells is suited for leadership no matter what faction they came from. Each Eljin thus far has worked for the Dark brotherhood, thieves guild, and fighters guild (companions for Skyrim) so I probably rp out too, Eljin the second contracted Lycanthropy which he felt made him closer to being a true hunter so that's going be part of the legacy too. The dragonborn theme in skyrim probably won't be part of him since that's more a nords thing. All pay homage to Hircine.

    I want rp this character as part of a legacy is that plausible in the game or just too far fetched?

    Prowl

  14. #14

    Caracala

    Member512 Posts
    MrProwley wrote on July 28, 2013

    I like to rp my character as a descendent of my Eljin In Skyrim who is thedescendent of my Eljin obvilion. All have the classic ranger persona to them and only joined the Aldermiafor game purposes in truth he doesn’t care for politics but does care that if an idiot gets put on the throne ready to fire an arrow at who he fells is suited for leadership no matter what faction they came from. Each Eljin thus far has worked for the Dark brotherhood, thieves guild, and fighters guild (companions for Skyrim) so I probably rp out too, Eljin the second contracted Lycanthropy which he felt made him closer to being a true hunter so that’s going be part of the legacy too. The dragonborn theme in skyrim probably won’t be part of him since that’s more a nords thing. All pay homage to Hircine.

    I want rp this character as part of a legacy is that plausible in the game or just too far fetched?

    Certainly plausible, but you cant play as a descendant of your previous characters, but rather as an ancestor.

    I should also note that both the Thieves guild and Dark Brotherhood are not going to be in the game at launch

    We’re coming for you in every one of your quarters, Sons of Shezzar. None shall survive.

  15. #15

    Zorkaluk

    Contributor1819 Posts

    Looking for some realistic weaknesses for my character, so people don't call me out for "godmodding". He's a battlemage/vampire (he has a ton of ic power but I locked him out of it for the above purpose). What are some ways I can balance him?

  16. #16

    MrProwley

    Member60 Posts

    oh then I was mistaken I thought this game took place after events of skyrim.

    Prowl

  17. #17

    Zorkaluk

    Contributor1819 Posts

    @MrProwley ESO takes place in the Second Era. Skyrim takes place in the Fourth Era, a few thousand years forward in time.

  18. #18

    MrProwley

    Member60 Posts

    Ah! and oblivion?

     

    Prowl

  19. #19

    Zorkaluk

    Contributor1819 Posts

    @MrProwley The other three games are situated in the Third Era, still before ESO. Not sure where Arena is.

  20. #20

    MrProwley

    Member60 Posts

    ah so this will be Eljin's ancestor the first Eljin...excellent

    Prowl

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